Producing a Page - Page 4

Below are stages in completing a page. These images are pasted in from my original aborted 4 page comic. Panel 1, though has been made into a tall panel, though to show the image of the horseman (an earlier work by Uccello, that may earn him a new commission), conveying it's scale.
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Figure 1

I was pleased with the text aspect of the page/scene transition: on the previous page his wife is telling him what will happen if he doesn't turn his fascination with perspective into...'a commission'. The previous scene was a at Uccello's studio where he had been talking to her about this painting. The problem though, was that I felt, a visual of the changed location was necessary, so I repaginated the panels to accommodate that, resulting in the (still unfinished) version at Figure 2.

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My second version (Figure 2, above) has a new first panel, giving an exterior shot of the location for the interior panels: The Florence Duomo (aka Cathedral). To help the flow, I have added a new dialogue balloon of Uccello relating the Duomo to his earlier 'lecture' to his wife about perspective. The addition of this panel, though created a challenge with the rest of the page, i.e. that I had to move the tall panel over to the right column. I had the same panel layout problem in my Vermeer comic: after the first panel, does the reader then to the right or down...? I want them to read down, ands have positioned the balloons to lead the reader through my intended order.

The amount of text on this page does create a challenge in arranging it on the page. This leads the eye into the bottom of the tall panel, and I deliberately made the balloons lead the eye up to the top of the panel, (and then back down) to have the reader experience the scale of the painting and its height on the wall. I think the balloon styles in my original versions worked well, but I may be able to further finesse the new additions.

I have redrawn the wall painting in the tall panel. I had originally drawn a coloured version, and pasted and distorted it into the different panels where it was required, however it was beginning to suffer from being pasted across programmes, and distorted so many times, so I redrew it.

I omitted the last panel on my original version, and used a similar image as a large panel on the next page.